As I take a look around
I get out of the Waka and
put my feet on the ground
When we arrive no one makes
a sound, I love my new home
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Hey Jolie I really liked your poem it was just awesome. My favourite part was when you said " As I took a look around, I get out of the waka and put my feet on the ground. What type of poem did you write? Anyways, Awesome Job
Jolie, I love that your poem rhymes and when you say "when we arrive, no-one makes a sound", I get the idea that you are standing in awe or shock of this new place that you have discovered... Very cool writing!
I appreciate youre comments. I really worked hard on this poem and I am happy to see that my friends like you guys, enjoyed reading my poem. Thank you for commenting.
No worries! I can tell you have worked hard on your poem. Make sure you share it with your teacher when you go back to school too, as I'm they'd love to see what you've been up to and how hard you've been working over the holidays :)
Hello Jolie I have really enjoyed reading your posts. I like how you used your rhyming words very discretely. If you had to do you in a different style of poem, which one would it be?
12 comments:
Hey Jolie
I really liked your poem it was just awesome.
My favourite part was when you said " As I took a look around, I get out of the waka and put my feet on the ground. What type of poem did you write? Anyways, Awesome Job
Jolie, I love that your poem rhymes and when you say "when we arrive, no-one makes a sound", I get the idea that you are standing in awe or shock of this new place that you have discovered... Very cool writing!
Nicky :)
Kia Ora Nicky and Vedel
I appreciate youre comments. I really worked hard on this poem and I am happy to see that my friends like you guys, enjoyed reading my poem. Thank you for commenting.
Hi Jolie!
No worries! I can tell you have worked hard on your poem. Make sure you share it with your teacher when you go back to school too, as I'm they'd love to see what you've been up to and how hard you've been working over the holidays :)
Nicky
Kia Ora Nicky
Thank you for commenting. I have been working very hard over the holidays. So I am relaxing by going to the bay of plenty.
Hey Jolie,
Oh enjoy your trip to the Bay of Plenty! I hope the weather is nicer for you down there :)
Nicky :)
Hi Jolie,
I really think that your poem is amazing im just speechless right now! keep up the great work!
Kia Ora Limi
Thank you for youre comment. I am glad to see that my friends like my poem including you. Once again thank you for commenting :)
No worries Jolie
Have a great break from school
Hello Jolie
I have really enjoyed reading your posts. I like how you used your rhyming words very discretely. If you had to do you in a different style of poem, which one would it be?
Hi Jolie
Good job on this activity. Your poem is great. I like the rhyming words on the end of each line. Keep up the good work.
Daniel
Kia Ora Daniel
Thank you for youre very nice comment :)
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